Critical-Newt's journey

I’ve been helping my boyfriend with his job search for finance roles in New York, but it's been tough. He’s been applying for months and hasn’t landed a single interview. I reached out for feedback on his resume, hoping to get some insights on how to improve it. A lot of the comments suggested that his resume is too lengthy and reads more like an essay than a concise summary of his qualifications. One commenter pointed out that his opening line about identifying a $70 million misclassification was too detailed and should be simplified. They recommended shortening every bullet point to make it easier for hiring managers to read. Another piece of advice was to include a skills section at the top that matches the job descriptions he’s applying for. It seems like he needs to focus on using buzzwords and phrases that are relevant to the positions to get past the initial screening. Some commenters also mentioned that his state school background might be a disadvantage in the competitive NYC finance scene, emphasizing the importance of networking and presenting a polished image. I’m hoping to take this feedback and help him refine his resume so he can finally get some interviews.